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Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

Deciding whether you should spend your entire life in one place or move a number of times can be a very complicated and difficult choice to make. You should consider a lot of things before making a decision. I have always been a gipsy and I have always loved to visit new places and discover new cultures, therefore I prefer to move a number of times throughout my life.

First of all, I think it's important to consider that when you move you can and probably will meet fantastic people. It doesn’t matter where you go you, will always meet people and depending where you go you will meet people from other cultures with different beliefs and habits. By way of example, I can recall when I moved to France I met a lot of different people; people with different religions and customs from mine. By meeting such different and interesting people I have learned how to accept and respect other cultures.

Hence, in addition to the importance of meeting people, I believe moving is always fun. Of course some people may think moving can be highly stressful and tedious, I however think it's fair to say that most times are fun and interesting. Without a question moving to different places is an adventure and like in most adventures it's always exciting. I can recall, when I helped a friend move in to central London, him and I did not know a thing about central London, much less about the place he was about to move in, even though we had no idea of what we were doing nor where we were, we had a blast.

Finally, moving to different places is always a valid experience. Not only you learn about new places and new cultures but you also start to learn more about yourself. When you move and you start living with people with different beliefs from yours and people who values things you don’t, you start questioning yourself of what you truly believe therefore you start to create new concepts and ideas and perhaps a different personality with new beliefs.

By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explores above, I strongly prefer to move to different places. However, many people believe that in order to have a balanced life and have a stabilized family you must live in only one place. Despite these claims, I still believe that moving is essential in one's life, no matter for how long or where a person decides to stay just, just the fact the person is moving and leaving their comfort zone behind is an extremely valid experience in one's life.