Welcome to the Forum, faugusto. Take a seat, feel at home!
As I am very short of time, I will give it just a kick-off. Here are my first impressions, if I may. Others will take up where I left off.
Tema:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
[Please, do what they asked, so try to stick to fact that you agree or disagree...]Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Essay: What is the importance of sports to a university? Should they give the same amout of money to sports as they give to libraries?
[Here you didn´t "answered his questions" he wanted to know wether you agree or not...instead you repeated his very words or almost.
As a basis of comparation you can see this one, you can see that the guy goes to the point head on.http://www.lougheed.com/LC/messages/513.html
Note: don´t try emulate his/her grammar etc. And the author argument is against, in the sense of more investment to libraries instead of sports. That happens, because in the US, sports are highly funded within Universities, you can see that running a search on Google.
Fact is, your composition is what you think, you can be pro/against or see advantages and disadvantages on some issue.
What they want to see, is wether your argument holds (if you are good at expressing yourself and get your point made)
That´s why I find important to say that about the above reference, it was just to show that you need to make a point, it was what was asked.
It´s a commom trait of many students to repeat some chunk of the "prompt" they are given, as way to have more lines (Brazilian students with Portuguese compositions/essays/texts) or the word counting (the American ones)...please try to avoid that whenever you can, teachers know best!
Of course, it´s not your case, I am saying that in a general way. As far as I am concerned, I believe (that) universities should spend the same amount of money with their student’s on sports as they give to libraries. Because sports can teach students important/valuable things like concentration and group work, along with improving student’s health.
As you see, I changed it a little bit. And that´s why:
- I believe that universities should give the same amount of money to their student’s sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
Firstly, it got very similar to the "prompt" they gave. Secondly, for variety´s sake, I replaced "give...money" for "spending...money".
Other fact is that, if universities are spending money on sports (giving money to sports activities, if you wish) I deemed
slightly unimportant to express that it is to "their students". A university wouldn´t spend money on students of other institutions, would it?
To me, until you build up some more vocabulary, you can make use of linguee/bab.la, and other sites like that. They offer several ways of saying the same thing, or related to them, and even the contrary.
Of course, with time, or at the day of the exam, you won´t do that. You will walk with your own legs, and will put your own words to the paper.
Don´t worry, though. I was a bit lenghty because I don´t know you level of English, that´s why I was so verbose!