I was born and(crew- wrong choice of word crew means tripulação equipe and it is a noun) bred
(the correct verb) in Zhenica, Brazil. It’s in the
south of Brazil.
The (city ) town
has approximately one hundred thousand people living there. The climate is hot in summer and cold in winter. In winter the temperature is between 5 degrees and 20 degrees.
In summer is between 20 degrees and 35 degrees. (Celsius – don’t forget to mention that)
( It isn’t) There isn’t a good night club, maybe ( has ) one now, but before( had) there were three.( but- let’s change this conjunction to an adverb -however- just to vary the vocabulary of your essay) ( has ) However, there are a lot bars and restaurants for a small (city) town.
(The main source of economic activity is (production of hats) hat, shirt and jeans industry.)
Sentence structure is wrong- the main source it means just one, if you want to mention more than one industry you should say: The main sources of economic activities are hat, shirt and jeans industry.
I would write: The main sources of economy are hat, shirt and jeans industry.
Or: The main source of economic activity is the clothing industry (or textile industry).
The ( city) town is 75 years-old (or the city) and was founded in 1950.
The (city) town has three great colleges and (a) many schools. The main (transport public- word order- remember in English, the adjective comes before the noun ) mean of transport is the public transport bus service.
(transporte público =Portuguese, public transport =English, cachorro quente= hot dog)
Actually, ( has) there are many cars( in the centre city) in downtown which is difficult (for) to find a parking spot.
The (city ) town is ( between ) among the seventy best( city) towns of (the) Brazil.
If you (go) come to visit here, you should go to Chenua Park where ( has) there is a nice lake. And you must eat the delicious potatoes at PItTopBatatas Lunch.
Some points to consider:
Pay attention to the use of the verb to have and there to be; Read the difference here:http://www.inglesnapontadalingua.com.br ... e-are.htmlhttp://www.grammar.cl/Present/ThereIsThereAre.htm
Difference between town and city:
We use city for big cities such as New York, Tokyo, Paris, Rio de Janeiro…
Could you read the link below, please?http://www.teclasap.com.br/falsas-gemeas-city-x-town/