Algumas sugestões estruturais:
SOME people TALK that nowadays men and women live in a gender-EQUAL SOCIETY, but we must be realistic, even WITH all the rights that we HAVE BEEN CONQUERING, we women still suffer discrimination on the streets, in WORKPLACES and even at home!
In all the world, women are always striving to reach their goals and to be seen as equal; Of course, TODAY women have more rights than before, but IN PRACTICE how these rights can help is not STILL quite (so - DROP IT!) functional.
(And - DROP IT!) It is clear that all this discrimination and gender inequality generate many cases of violence against women, which often lead to DEATHS.
In many countries women are still prohibited from studying, they are considered inferior to men, (suffer from maternal mortality - IT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE INTO THIS TEXT!), THEY ARE BY FAR THE MOST FREQUENT VICTIMS OF domestic violence, EARLY and FORCED marriage, false PROFESSIONAL and POLITICAL equality and yet there is a supremacy of men over women, CHINA COULD BE MENTIONED AS AN EXAMPLE OF THIS, where most parents prefer sons.
IT IS NOT AN ISSUE only in countries with certain BELIEVES and religions that women suffer, we see that large countries SUCH AS THE USA, WHERE FEMALE WORKERS earn 30% less than MALE, women can BE a CEO more often, many MIGHT STILL think THAT only a man would do a good job.
Women are seen AS fragile and inferior, AS ONES WHO COULD not BE LEFT alone the night, not dress as THEY want, not date multiple people, NOR EVEN travel alone. Why? Because THEY'RE women, IF THEY DO THAT, THEY MAY BE BRANDED vulgar OR easy WOMEN, who DOES not deserve respect or that THEY ARE ASKING to be HARASSED.
Why DO women have TO BE always fighting for equality? Why DO we have always fight for honor? What is IT CONSIDERED more honest and respectful in a man THAN IN A woman?
Women HAVE been STRUGGLING for equality FOR more than 100 years, and this is a fight without AN end. We have to continue what those strong women BEGAN in the past, because we are AS equally worthy and capable AS MEN.
We SHOULD not allow our VOICES and wills BE taken AWAY.