Correção de texto: Discrimination against women

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People like to talk that nowadays men and women live in a gender equality, but we must be realistic, even as all the rights that we won, we women still suffer discrimination on the streets, in the working and even at home!
In all the world, women are always striving to reach their goals and to be seen as equal, and of course nowadays women have more rights than before, but how these rights can help when are put into practice is not quite so functional .
And it is clear that all this discrimination and gender inequality generate many cases of violence against women, which often lead to death.
In many countries women are still prohibited from studying, they are considered inferior to men, suffer from maternal mortality, domestic violence, forced and early marriage, false political equality and professional and yet there is a supremacy of men over women, which is an example China where most parents prefer sons.
Not is only in countries with certain beliefs and religions that women suffer, we see that in large countries like USA women working arrive earn 30% less than men, women can to be a CEO more often many will think only a man would do a good job.
Women are seen with fragile and inferior, can not leave alone the night, can not dress as we want, we can not date multiple people and we can not travel alone. Why? Because we are women, we did this will be viewed like a vulgar woman, an easy woman , who do not deserve respect or that we are asked to be attacked.
Why women have who are always fighting for equality?Why we have always fight for honor? What is a more honest and respectful in a man that in woman?
Women has been fighting for equality to more than 100 years, and this is a fight without end. We have to continue what those strong women in the past began, because we are equally worthy and capable than a man.
We can not allow our voice and our wills are taken from us.

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SOME people TALK that nowadays men and women live in a gender-EQUAL SOCIETY, but we must be realistic, even WITH all the rights that we HAVE BEEN CONQUERING, we women still suffer discrimination on the streets, in WORKPLACES and even at home!
In all the world, women are always striving to reach their goals and to be seen as equal; Of course, TODAY women have more rights than before, but IN PRACTICE how these rights can help is not STILL quite (so - DROP IT!) functional.
(And - DROP IT!) It is clear that all this discrimination and gender inequality generate many cases of violence against women, which often lead to DEATHS.
In many countries women are still prohibited from studying, they are considered inferior to men, (suffer from maternal mortality - IT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE INTO THIS TEXT!), THEY ARE BY FAR THE MOST FREQUENT VICTIMS OF domestic violence, EARLY and FORCED marriage, false PROFESSIONAL and POLITICAL equality and yet there is a supremacy of men over women, CHINA COULD BE MENTIONED AS AN EXAMPLE OF THIS, where most parents prefer sons.
IT IS NOT AN ISSUE only in countries with certain BELIEVES and religions that women suffer, we see that large countries SUCH AS THE USA, WHERE FEMALE WORKERS earn 30% less than MALE, women can BE a CEO more often, many MIGHT STILL think THAT only a man would do a good job.
Women are seen AS fragile and inferior, AS ONES WHO COULD not BE LEFT alone the night, not dress as THEY want, not date multiple people, NOR EVEN travel alone. Why? Because THEY'RE women, IF THEY DO THAT, THEY MAY BE BRANDED vulgar OR easy WOMEN, who DOES not deserve respect or that THEY ARE ASKING to be HARASSED.
Why DO women have TO BE always fighting for equality? Why DO we have always fight for honor? What is IT CONSIDERED more honest and respectful in a man THAN IN A woman?
Women HAVE been STRUGGLING for equality FOR more than 100 years, and this is a fight without AN end. We have to continue what those strong women BEGAN in the past, because we are AS equally worthy and capable AS MEN.
We SHOULD not allow our VOICES and wills BE taken AWAY.
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Redseahorse Thank you ,It helps a lot! :D
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