Correção de texto em inglês: "My city"

I live in Montes Claros. It's a nice city. It's a big city and has about 450,000 people. It has colleges, churchs, nice stores, and some cinemas. It has very young, specially students. It's in northern Minas Gerais.
I like walk in the center of city and see the stores, the people, and my favourite places. I study every day in the public library. I like buy books in the bookstore, eat ice-cream in the Italian ice cream and go to popular Shopping. There I buy CD's and movies. I love my city. :mrgreen:
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I live in Montes Claros. It's a nice city. It's a big city and it has about 450,000 people. It has colleges, churches, nice stores, and some cinemas. It has many young people, especially students. It's in northern Minas Gerais.
I like to walk downtown and see the stores, the people, and my favourite places. I study every day in the public library. I like to buy books in the bookstores, eat ice-cream in the Italian ice cream parlour and go to popular Shopping Centers. There, I buy CDs and movies. I love my city.



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I like to buy books in the bookstores, eat ice-cream in the Italian ice cream parlour and go to popular Shopping Centers. There, I buy CDs and movies. I love my city.

Two points I would say you could redo; but somehow, they wouldn´t change the sense much.
So, not a matter of wrong or right ways, just a matter of writting style, perhaps.
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I like to buy books in the bookstores, eat ice-cream in the Italian ice cream parlour and go to Shopping Centers/Malls. There, I buy CDs and DVD (or DVD movies/a movie on DVD). I love my city.