Correção de texto em inglês: My grandfather!

Quero escrever um texto em homenagem ao meu avô, em inglês. Abaixo está a minha tentativa. Se alguém puder corrigir os erros ou sugerir palavras/expressões melhores, agradeço imensamente! THANK YOU!

"Father's Day, fortunately, with my father. But also the first without my grandfather, who was like a father.
Today I remember when I was 12 and I started complaining for being "skinny/too thin". Sitting in the living room table, he listened to me until I was done/ I was finished . So, he took a magazine and showed me a picture of an actress, saying: "This was the most beautiful actress in cinema history, and she was thin! I'm not saying that because you're my granddaughter, but because you're beautiful! Don't complain for no reason!"
At that moment I could see that his eyes were brimming with tears and so were mine.
I miss him every single day! But I'm grateful I had a grandfather who was such a great man!

The actress was Audrey Hepburn and this is the picture he showed me!"


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Father's Day, fortunately with my father but also the first without my grandfather, who was like a father to me.
Today, I remember when I was 12 and I started complaining for being "skinny/too thin". Sitting in the living room table, he listened to me until I was done/ I was finished talking. So he took a magazine and showed me a picture of an actress, saying: "This was the most beautiful actress in cinema history and she was thin! I'm not saying that because you're my granddaughter, but because you're beautiful! Don't complain for no reason!"

At that moment, I could see that his eyes were brimming with tears and so were mine.
I miss him every single day! But I'm grateful I had a grandfather who was such a great man!

The actress was Audrey Hepburn and this is the picture he showed me!