Correção de "texto em inglês sobre enfermagem"

I thought that I should write about my profession. I’m officially a nurse since 2010.
In Portugal there are, nowadays, a several economic crises, so, there are a lot of unemployment.
I just get my first job as a nurse six months after finish my graduate and it wasn’t in my country, but in Spain, not so far for my city. I worked there, in a Home Care, for five months.
Then, I return to Portugal and stay other long time unemployed until November 2011, when I start working in a new health care unit for elderly people.
I’m very happy with this new job, but, the possibility of working outside is always open and United Kingdom offers every year lots of opportunities for nurse’s career.
That’s why I really want learn English…just in case… :p
Editado pela última vez por Donay Mendonça em 17 Fev 2012, 17:55.
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I thought that I should write about my profession. I’ve officially been a nurse since 2010.
In Portugal, there is nowadays a several economic crisis so there is a lot of unemployment.
I got my first job as a nurse six months after I finished my graduate course and it wasn’t in my country, but in Spain, not so far away from my city. I worked there, in a Home Care, for five months.
Then, I returned to Portugal and was unemployed for a long time, until November 2011, when I started working in a new health care unit for elderly people.
I’m very happy with this new job, but the possibility of working abroad is always open and the United Kingdom offers every year lots of opportunities for nurse’s careers.
That’s why I really want to learn English…just in case…
Thank's :D
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