Correção de texto: God-like mentality

Taking into account that a large number of people are pessimistic with the current problem of economics corruption; It should be remembered that these difficulties are not permanents. Even if the factors are connected, another areas are thriving.

Individuals need to be careful, for not bring these problems into your own life; They are not the problem, they are the solution.

Capitalism produces that crise, the god-like mentality of 'go over everything' or 'win no matter how'. Capitalism also produces infinity fear. It fear destroys all relationships, undermines our trust and favors greed.

The greed without limits, the relation with the political power and the unlimited capacity of improve life benefits, promotes poverty populations -- derived of speculation.

Therefore, we become increasingly depressed about everything (about our impotence) and produce inexhaustibly is no longer enough for to our happiness.

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Tentei escrever sobre o capitalismo e a crise econômica, sem gírias e de modo mais formal. Tentei escrever na terceira pessoa (passive voice).

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Taking into account that a large number of people are pessimistic with the current problem of economic corruption; It should be remembered that these difficulties aren't permanent. Even if the factors are connected, other areas are thriving. Individuals must be careful not to bring these problems into their own lives; They aren't the problems, they're the solution. Capitalism has created this crisis , the god-like mentality of 'go over everything' or 'win no matter how'. Capitalism also produces infinity fear, its fear destroys all relationships, undermines our trust and promotes greed. The greed without limits, the relation with the political power and the unlimited capacity of improving certain kinds of life benefits helps in the emergence of deficient communities for all over the world.( Derived from speculation). Therefore, we become increasingly depressed about everything (about our inability) and exhaustible production is no longer enough for our happiness.
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Destacar as partes em negrito, ajudou muito na verificação do texto. Obrigado.
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