Correção de texto "I worked a lot"

Hello Everyone, could you please verify if have any mistake ? thanks a lot.

Today i worked a lot, but i understood that while i work, other people spent your time playing online games, i do not have a father rich and because this a had to work early.

I thought today that more a work more a can to do things and meeting people inteligent, because this i'm very happy to start work early and meanwhile other people coming your time played online games and lost you life when could work and get money for spent vacation in an other places.

I thought that i have to work a lot or funny a lot?

Bruno
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APRESENTAÇÃO PESSOAL EM INGLÊS
Nesta aula, a professora Camila Oliveira ensina como você deve se preparar para fazer uma apresentação pessoal profissional em inglês. O conteúdo dessa aula ajudará você a aproveitar melhor as oportunidades no ambiente corporativo. ACESSAR AULA
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Donay Mendonça 23 127 1.7k
Bruno,

Algumas sugestões de correção:

Today I worked a lot, but I understood that while I work, other people spend their time playing online games. I do not have a rich father so I have to start working early.


Bons estudos!
donay, bom dia!

Thank you for your observations.

Only a doubt, can i use "so" on formal texts ?

I always have this question in my mind.


Bruno
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Donay Mendonça 23 127 1.7k
Bruno,

Não é tão comum, mas há casos. Usa-se muito "thus" formalmente.