Boa Noite amigos, gostaria de saber se alguém fazendo o favor poderia dar uma olhada em uma redação que eu fiz para uma oportunidade de trainee. A prova era por web conferência e tive que fazer uma redação meio que numa surpresa. Tive 20 minutos para fazê-la e gostaria de saber se ficou muito ruim ou se teve muitos erros, para que eu possa melhorar o meu inglês.
Grato desde já!
A redação é para contar um pouco sobre mim, o por que escolhi o meu curso, as experiências, etc...e o motivo da escolha da oportunidade e o que ela pode fazer para minha carreira.
I would like to say something about me, what my expectations are and why I have chosen this opportunity.
My name is Vitor XXX XXX. I am twenty one years old. I live with my mother and my brother and I study XXXX XX XXX XXXX in XXXX. The interest for study XXXX started when I was in high school when I had a school work about programming an calculator. After finished that task I want to learn more and more about programming. When I got in college, I have my first experience as intern. I had two experiences as intern. First experience I worked as java web programmer. The second experience as intern I work as system analysist, my main activities include java programming (XXXX), provide support for Oracle users, database modeling and system integration. All this great opportunities helped me to develop my tech and personal skills. I became a responsible person and I learned to work in teamwork.
After my last intern, I decide to get a trainee opportunity and intend to keep my career as Oracle consultant or system analysist. Because I understood how an ERP work and why the company need this kind of solution and I loved provide support. I think with this opportunity I can learn more about act like as system analysist and hopeful contribute with the company to achieve her objectives and goals.