Correção de texto "Lisa was sitting on the sands..."

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Lisa was sitting on the sands under her sunshade, when Taylor said:
Where´s Jane? We need to have a conversation.
Lisa: She is at the kiosk. She wanted a drink.
Taylor: Oh! Look! She forgot her wallet. I should to go there! See you later, Lisa.

Taylor ran so fast and finally found Jane. Then he said to her:
Hey, Jane! You forgot your wallet.
Jane: Oh! Thank you so much! I´m very heedless. Do you want something to eat?
Taylor: Yes! I´d like a hamburguer and some water.
Jane: Ok!

Then the both sat in a big table. Taylor to take advantage of all this, said:
You know I love you, don´t you?
Jane´s cheeks turned red when she murmured:
Really! Oh, Taylor! I always loved you since I was just a girl.
Taylor: So, do you want to court me?
Jane: Of course I want!
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Lisa was sitting on the sand under her sunshade, when Taylor said:
Where´s Jane? We need to have a conversation. (or: chat, talk)
Lisa: She is at the kiosk. She wanted a drink.
Taylor: Oh! Look! She forgot her wallet (or: purse (for women)). I should go over there! See you later, Lisa.

Taylor ran fast and finally found Jane. Then he said to her:
Hey, Jane! You forgot your wallet.
Jane: Oh! Thank you so much! I wasn't paying attention. Do you want something to eat?
Taylor: Yes! I´d like a hamburger and some water.
Jane: Ok!

Then they both sat at a big table. Taylor, to take advantage of all this, said:
You know I love you, don´t you?
Jane´s cheeks turned red when she murmured:
Really! Oh, Taylor! I always loved you since I was just a girl.
Taylor: So, do you want to go out with me?
Jane: Of course I do!