Correção de texto: "One way trip to Mars: Pioneering spirit"

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Recently we have hard about Mars One's intention of sending humans to mars, in order to colonize that Planet, in a one way trip. When we hear things like this, some of us remember the Apollo program and the pioneering spirit of those men an women. Others, on the other hand, raise questions whether this mission is really possible or not.
The first big issue involving Mars One's mission is money. They claim that they will earn the money they need by making some sort of reality show about the mission. Although reality shows usually conquer people's attention, it's almost impossible to earn the money they need by doing this.
The second big problem is radiation. Despite all the progress we had in science in the last few years, there is no a technology that can protect the human body from long term exposure to radiation.
If we consider all these facts, we can say that, although humans have dreamt about colonizing Mars for decades, we are not yet ready to do so, and probably we will have to wait a few more years.

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Lately we have heard about Mars One's intention of sending humans to Mars, in order to colonize that Planet, on a one-way trip. When we hear things like this, some of us remember the Apollo program and the pioneering spirit of those men and women. Others, on the other hand, raise questions whether this mission is really possible or not.
The first big issue involving Mars One's mission is money. They claim that they will earn the money they need by making some sort of reality show about the mission. Although reality shows usually capture/grab/catch/draw/attract (etc) people's attention, it's almost impossible to earn the money they need by doing this.
The second big problem is radiation. Despite all the progress we have had in science in the last few years, there is no a technology that can protect the human body from long term exposure to radiation.
If we consider all these facts, we can say that, although humans have dreamt about colonizing Mars for decades, we are not yet ready to do so, and probably we will have to wait a few more years.
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