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Modeling since the age of 15, Natalie Lim Suarez has been a notable figure in the fashion industry for years. Based in NYC, she is 1/2 Chinese, 1/4 Spanish, and 1/4 Mexican. With her passion for photography, creative direction, design, music, writing, modeling, and style, NATALIE OFF DUTY was born. Completely inspired by the "model off duty" on-the-go lifestyle. Sharing her stories, inspirations, and projects through her own photography and writing. Already noted for her winning fans in Harper's Bazaar UK, featured editorials in ELLE, and WWD for her "Good Taste." Along with campaigns and ambassadorships to top fashion and beauty brands from around the world. Some including COACH, DKNY, L'oreal Paris, Saks 5th Avenue, Sunglass Hut, Levis, and Nordstrom. Her eclectic, unique style has launched many successful design collaborations sold in top retailers around the world. Next to fashion, Natalie's other passion is music. Singing along with piano/guitar continue to pop up in her upcoming fashion campaigns.

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Natalie Lim Suarez has been a notable figure in the fashion industry for years, modeling since the age of 15. Based in NYC, she is 1/2 Chinese, 1/4 Spanish, and 1/4 Mexican. NATALIE OFF DUTY was born from her passion for photography, creative direction, design, music, writing, modeling, and style and was inspired by the “model off duty” on-the-go lifestyle. The blog was created in order to share her stories, inspirations and projects through her own photography and writing and it was already noted for her winning fans in Harper's Bazaar UK, featured editorials in ELLE, and WWD for her "Good Taste”. She is participant of campaigns and ambassadorships to top fashion and beauty brands from around the world. Some including COACH, DKNY, L'oreal Paris, Saks 5th Avenue, Sunglass Hut, Levis, and Nordstrom. Many successful design collaborations sold in top retailers around the world were released by her eclectic, unique style. In addition to fashion, Natalie’s other passion is music. Her forthcoming fashion campaigns come with sing along with piano and guitar.
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