Correção de texto sobre capitalismo

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Eu gostaria de saber se vocês poderiam corrigir este meu texto para uma tarefa. É apenas um breve resumo do capitalismo.

Capitalism is a social and economic system based on capital accumulation whose means of production are privatized. It arose on the 20th Century following the decadence of feudal system and the emergence of a new social class: the bourgeoisie.

Therefore, it was during the transition from the Middle age to the Morden age that several changes took place in the social and economic ambit, such as: the progress, the urbanization and the advent of new production methods.

It worth pointing out that capitalism, as it is known nowadays, has gone through many modifications, though it still is founded on profit.


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Capitalism is a social and economic system based on capital accumulation WHERE THE means of production are privatized. It arose IN the 20th Century, following the DECLINE OF FEUDALISM and the emergence of a new social class: The Bourgeoisie.

Therefore, it was during the transition from the Middle TO THE MODERN age that, several changes took place in the social and economic ambit, such as: the progress, the urbanization and the advent of new production methods.

IT´S worth pointing out that capitalism, as it is known nowadays, has PASSED through many modifications, though it IS STILL founded on profit.