Correção de texto: Syndrome of the twenties

Life is so confusing. It's so chock-full of ups and downs. When we are in our twenties we are adult enough for many things, but still, we might not know how to handle many things at some points. After all, we are still so young. That's the hardest part of being a young person, you have a lot of responsibilities but not too much experience. Also, we take notice that our friends circle is not so big after all, or you might not know who are your true friends. You are struggling to have a career, doing sacrifices to maybe have a better opportunity in the future. Laughing louder, and crying with least tears but with more pain. Money is more important than ever, as much as you work hard, your money vanishes and there will be something missing because your small salary couldn't cover it. It looks like yesterday you were 15, but you are worried because tomorrow you'll turn 30.
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Texto original:

Life is so confusing. It's so chock-full of ups and downs. When we are in our twenties we are adult enough for many things, but still, we might not know how to handle many things at some points. After all, we are still so young. That's the hardest part of being a young person, you have a lot of responsibilities but not too much experience. Also, we take notice that our friends circle is not so big after all, or you might not know who are your true friends. You are struggling to have a career, doing sacrifices to maybe have a better opportunity in the future. Laughing louder, and crying with least tears but with more pain. Money is more important than ever, as much as you work hard, your money vanishes and there will be something missing because your small salary couldn't cover it. It looks like yesterday you were 15, but you are worried because tomorrow you'll turn 30.

Texto original:

Life is so confusing. It's so chock-full of ups and downs. When we are in our twenties we are adult enough for many things, but still, we might not know how to handle many things at some points. After all, we are still so young. That's the hardest part of being a young person, you have a lot of responsibilities but not too much experience. Also, we take notice that our friends circle is not so big after all, or you may not know who are your true friends. You are struggling to have a career, doing sacrifices to have possibly a better opportunity in the future. Laughing louder, and crying with least tears but with more pain. Money is more important than ever, as much as you work hard, your money vanishes and there will be something missing because your small salary couldn't cover it. It looks like yesterday you were 15, but you are worried because tomorrow you'll turn 30.

OBS: No inglês, o advérbio de frequência "maybe" não é usado em meio de frase, mas apenas no começo, (alguns casos você irá encontrar o "maybe" no final da frase mas é um uso muito informal) por isso eu o substitui por "possibly". E também não usamos nenhum advérbio depois de "to", mas apenas verbos na forma infinitiva.

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