Correção de texto: The History of Tattoo

The History of Tattoo is unit with the history of humanity. The wish for paint our body probably started looking the nature. The most part of the wild animals has brands in its skin. Maybe this had been the start of the primitive man want to do tattoos. Through prehistoric art, we can find traces of existence of people who covered their bodies with drawing. Other fact to be considered, are the win´s marks. During the confrontation, they easily got marks and scars. With this mark, they could have respect of society and women. After that, seeing that marks were synonymous with respect and differentiation, people start made them own marks giving space to creation of cartoons using vegetable ink and thorns to introduce ink in the (or under) skin. Thereafter a lot different people started wear tattoo for several reasons like spiritual, war, rituals…
This mummy had(was) discovered in 1991in Italy; he lived 5.300 years before Christ and has tattoos in his leg, wrist and back.
In 787 the Catholic Church forbade all Europe to do tattoos because it were thing of devil, with intention to introduce them doctrine almost dictatorial for not to say dictatorial. Any king of scar or draw in skin had (was) seen with bad eyes. After years, it being used just by marginal and closed groups, tattoos had introduced again in Europe in 18th century with explorer who put the Europeans in touch with different cultures.
The first one to adopt the tattoo ware the sailor. They marked their body with important facts in their life and people that they loved.
The word tattoo was written by Captain James Cook, who made up the Surf too. After 1920, the tattoo became more commercial, but for many years was associated with poor people like sailors, hookers and criminals.
During the Second World War, Hitler ordered tattoo numbers in Jewish´s arms. 30 years later the artistic class become to recover the esthetic principles of tattoo and take off the negative view. In the late 60´s and in the early 70´s were the bikers and rockers who adopted the tattoo to show their love a fidelity about the group, but the both were not welcomed by society. In the early 90´s, artists and models began to wear tattoo with symbols and love´s phases. Now a day, more people started to get tattoos and this make part of day-by-day.

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Carol segue a correção da primeira fase do seu texto:
The history of Tattoo is one(is related/united) with the history of humanity (unit = unidade --> nao pode ser usado). The will(Wish) to (for não pode ser usado) paint our bodies(lembrar que our é nosso ou seja, use o plural de body) probably started by observing nature(looking at) (the nature geralmente é usado com algum completemento, ex: the nature of "something"). The majority(The most part é tradução literal se for para ser usado usar sem o the ficando "Most part") of the wild animals have brands on their skin(A tatuagens são sobre a pele não dentro dela, e novamente animals é plural usar Their).

Ia corrigir tudo, mas acabei só traduzindo o começo do texto por ter notado que esse texto foi feito quase que inteiramente com o tradutor do google(se não todo)(Os erros são tipicos do tradutor), e não gostaria simplesmente de corrigir por corrigir e sim ensinar quem tem interesse.

Portanto te recomendaria começar o seu estudo pelo:
1 - Uso de pronomes, diversas vezes você usa pronomes errados
2- O uso de tempos verbais mais complexos(Os "perfects" em geral)
E principalmente se você não sabe uma palavra pensar em sinônimos o que pode lhe ajudar bastante!
Abc e bom aprendizado