Correção de texto "The prevention and treatment..."

Hey, everyone.

Gostaria de saber se poderiam me auxiliar com a correção com a introdução abaixo:

"Introduction:
The prevention and treatment of cardiovascular disease (CVD), the leading cause of mortality in developed countries and in Brazil, include non-pharmacological measures and among them physical activity is an important factor. "

Thanks in advance.

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PPAULO 6 47 1.1k
Introduction:
The prevention and treatment of Cardiovascular Disease (CVD), the leading cause of mortality in developed countries and in Brazil; includeS non-pharmacological measures, and among them physical activity.


It´s my view here, others will certainly change and improve it.
Thanks.
Henry Cunha 3 17 182
PPAULO escreveu:Introduction:
The prevention and treatment of Cardiovascular Disease (CVD), the leading cause of mortality in developed countries and in Brazil; includeS non-pharmacological measures, and among them physical activity.


It´s my view here, others will certainly change and improve it.
No semicolon, though, PPaulo. We need 'includes' as the predicate of 'The prevention...disease (CVD)'. Just use a comma:

The prevention and treatment of CVD, the leading cause of mortality in dveloped countries and in Brazil, includes non-pharmacological measures, among them physical activity.

The underlined parts are the essential; the others are parenthetical.
PPAULO 6 47 1.1k
That´s right, thanks for improving it.
I would just keep the bit "The prevention and treatment of Cardiovascular Disease (CVD)...", tough.
It´s out of habit; when talking about a given acronym for the first time, I always
write it togheter with the description of what the acronym stands for.
When mentioning for the second time, and from onwards on, I could mention just the acronym itself. Since the reader already knows what it stands for. But then, it´s me. ;)
Again, thanks for the grammar point, buddy. ;)
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