Correção de texto: The secretary (the plot)

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The soap opera El Secretário tell the story of Emilio Romero, a finance professional who had been living in US for seven years, in order to accomplish the American dream, he worked there as pizza deliverer, whitch has not to do with his degree. But later on he found out that he has a 6-years-old child in Colombia, which motivated him to go back to his country to give the child attention.

Given the lack of money to go back to Colombia, Emilio was convinced by a so called friend to deliver some clothes to his shop, but when he put his food down on Colombia he was dettened by police because there were thousands of dollars hidden in the baggage, but he collaborated with justice finding the main responsible for the wrongdoing, then he is released on conditional discharge, and ,starts her seeking a job so that he can take care of her doughter who become the reason of her life.

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The soap opera El Secretário tell the story of Emilio Romero, a finance professional who had been living in US for seven years, in order to accomplish the American dream, he worked there as pizza deliverer, whitch has not to do with his degree. But later on he found out that he has a 6-years-old child in Colombia, which motivated him to go back to his country to give the child attention.

Given the lack of money to go back to Colombia, Emilio was convinced by a so called friend to deliver some clothes to his shop, but when he put his food down on Colombia he was dettened by police because there were thousands of dollars hidden in the baggage, but he collaborated with justice finding the main responsible for the wrongdoing, then he is released on conditional discharge, and ,starts her seeking a job so that he can take care of her doughter who become the reason of her life.

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The soap opera El Secretário tells the story of Emilio Romero, a financial professional who had been living in US for seven years, in order to achieve the American dream, he worked there as pizza deliverer, which has nothing to do with his degree. But later on he found out that he has a 6-year-old child in Colombia, which motivated him to go back to his country to give the child [an effective] attention.

Given the lack of money to go back to Colombia, Emilio was convinced by a so called friend to deliver some clothes to his shop, but when he set foot in Colombia he was detained by police because there were thousands of dollars hidden in the baggage, but he cooperated with the law enforcement (OU cooperated with the legal system) to find the main responsible for the wrongdoing, then he was released on conditional discharge and, started is job search (OU started to seek a job) so that he can take care of his daughter who became the reason of his life.

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6-year-old é adjetivo (não varia nem em género nem em número), está a qualificar o substantivo child