Correção de texto: War on terror

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War on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights

It is difficult to me to defend or attack the affirmation that war on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights. Actually, I don't kown nothing about war on terror and even less about human rights. I just desagree the discimination against some ethnic group which are considered as terrorists. Also, I'm not feel good with the ideia of militars invading another nations and ditacting the laws there.

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I find it difficult [estilo] to either [ênfase opcional] defend or dispute the claim [estilo e semântica] that the war on terror has contributed to the growing abuse of human rights. Actually, I don't know anything [gramática] about the war on terror and even less about human rights. I do, however, [estilo] disagree with the discrimination against some [desnecessário] ethnic groups which are viewed / lumped together* [semântica] as terrorists. Also, I don't feel comfortable [estilo e colocação] with the ideia of military troops invading other nations and dictating their laws there [estilo].

Nota:

*Para evitar generalizações, sugeri o uso de "lump together", que reflete a ideia de estereotipar um grupo baseando-se nas crenças e ideias de certos, mas não todos, elementos desse grupo.
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