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The beggars are people who need help because they do not have home, almost any money and usually do not havy a good family members for help him or her. It is very important to help those people but give just the money is not a good idea.

There is doubt, give a "cash" is a good thing for help these people. But the problem is: You do not know how the beggars are going to use the money. He or She can use to buy drogs and that isn't good for the society. So, instead of give just the money, you can buy food or search a good job for this kind of persons.

Secondly, the monay donations, for some beggars, can cause acomodation. So, the persons can stay in a addiction circle. They will not work for a better life because they know that there are people who can help them any time. The government assistence, given for those people, is a good example of that.

That way, It is very important to have in mind that beggars are people and they need to be respect like everyone. Help people who need help is part of "to be human" and each one need to contribute for a better world.

APRESENTAÇÃO PESSOAL EM INGLÊS
Nesta aula, a professora Camila Oliveira ensina como você deve se preparar para fazer uma apresentação pessoal profissional em inglês. O conteúdo dessa aula ajudará você a aproveitar melhor as oportunidades no ambiente corporativo. ACESSAR AULA
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Redseahorse 4 35 575
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The beggars are people who need help, because they MAY not have A home, almost any money and THEY usually do not HAVE good family members for HELPING THEM. It is very important to help those people, but JUST GIVING THEM money MIGHT not BE a good idea.

FIRSTLY, There is AN UNCERTAINTY THAT GIVING "cash" is a good thing for HELPING THOSE people. But the problem is: You do not know how the beggars are going to use the money. He or She can use IT to buy DRUGS and that isn't good for the society. So, instead of JUST GIVING money, you COULD buy THEM food or HELP THEM TO search a good job.

Secondly, FOR SOME BEGGARS MONEY donations COULD cause THEM AN ACCOMMODATION. So, the PEOPLE COULD stay in a VICIOUS CYCLE. They will not work for a better life, because they know that there are people who can help them any time. The government ASSISTANCE given TO those people, is a good example of that.

THEREFORE, It is very important to have in mind that beggars are people and AS EVERYONE, they DESERVE respect. Help people who need IT is part of " BEING human " and each one NEEDS to contribute for a better world.
Redseahorse , muito obrigado. Estou tentando ver quais pontos na gramática estou fraca.
Possuo uma pergunta : Porque o ING como no caso "HELPING THEM" esta no sentido de infinitivo?
Existe alguma regra para isso?
PPAULO 6 49 1.3k
Yes, after a preposition we use an ING verb (that is, a verb in the gerund form).
The topic would be "gerund and infinitive with verbs"/verbs followed by gerunds or infinitives, etc.
You can use Google or this Forum grammar section, to that end.
Redseahorse 4 35 575
Sendo FOR uma preposição, ela modifica o verbo posterior o colocando no gerúndio, sem contudo, altera-lo, o sentido permanece o mesmo da forma infinitiva do verbo. Deste modo, tanto FOR quanto TO poderiam ser usados: (FOR HELPING) ou (TO HELP).

Com verbos, a preposição FOR pode ser comumente usada em substituição ao TO, para expressar FUNÇÃO: (You need something FOR storing your shoes), ou MOTIVO/RAZÃO: (Beyoncé is famous FOR being a good singer).

* Qdo o objetivo for o de expressar INTENÇÃO/OBJETIVO, obrigatoriamente deve-se usar a forma infinitiva: (He´s in The UK now studying TO BE a journalist).