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- Liziane_639
- Membro desde: 07 Jan 2023, 21:09
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Hello, my name is Alice Stwart, I'm 36 years old, and I live in Rio de Janeiro. I've been working as a Psychotherapist, Occupational Therapist, and Holistic Therapist at HG Rio de Janeiro since 2016. I graduated as an Occupational Therapist from PUC-RIO in 2013 and specialized in Psychotherapy and Holistic Therapies from the Brazilian Institute of Holistic Therapies in 2021. Initially, I worked as an Occupational Therapist, but later I added other roles to my position as I gained specialized training. "I specialize in family, couples, and individual therapy and manage a team of novice therapists undergoing training and internships at this hospital. Personally, I thoroughly enjoy my work and take great satisfaction in contributing to my patients' overall well-being improvement in every possible aspect. However, holistic therapy holds a special place in my heart. It treats the human body as a whole, addressing mental, emotional, physical, and spiritual aspects, aligning all the bodies we possess.
Mentoring future therapists is also incredibly rewarding for me. I believe this is my life's purpose."
Mentoring future therapists is also incredibly rewarding for me. I believe this is my life's purpose."
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- Luis Fidelis
- Membro desde: 12 Jan 2022, 00:27
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It's perfect!
- Redseahorse
- Localização: Brazil
- Membro desde: 26 Jan 2015, 14:13
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Liziane_639,
Encontre abaixo, no texto revisado, algumas sugestões e pequenas alterações, que eu entendi serem interessantes.
* Especial atenção para:
Uso do pronome I (sujeito), nas orações mais longas;
Início de palavras (aqui, títulos e formações), com letras minúsculas.
"Hi, my name is Alice Stwart; I am 36 years old, and I live in Rio de Janeiro.
I have been working as a psychotherapist, occupational therapist, and holistic therapist at the HG Rio de Janeiro since 2016. I graduated as an occupational therapist from PUC-RIO in 2013, and I specialized in psychotherapy and holistic therapies from the Brazilian Institute of Holistic Therapies in 2021.
Initially, I worked as an occupational therapist, but later I added other roles to my position as I gained expertise. I specialized in family, couples, and individual therapy.
I manage a team of novice therapists undergoing training and internships at this hospital. Personally, I thoroughly enjoy my work, and I take great satisfaction in contributing to my patients' overall well-being improvement in every possible aspect. However, holistic therapy holds a special place in my heart because it treats the human body as a whole, addressing mental, emotional, physical, and spiritual aspects and aligning all the bodies we possess.
Mentoring future therapists is also incredibly rewarding for me. I believe this is my life's purpose."
Encontre abaixo, no texto revisado, algumas sugestões e pequenas alterações, que eu entendi serem interessantes.
* Especial atenção para:
Uso do pronome I (sujeito), nas orações mais longas;
Início de palavras (aqui, títulos e formações), com letras minúsculas.
"Hi, my name is Alice Stwart; I am 36 years old, and I live in Rio de Janeiro.
I have been working as a psychotherapist, occupational therapist, and holistic therapist at the HG Rio de Janeiro since 2016. I graduated as an occupational therapist from PUC-RIO in 2013, and I specialized in psychotherapy and holistic therapies from the Brazilian Institute of Holistic Therapies in 2021.
Initially, I worked as an occupational therapist, but later I added other roles to my position as I gained expertise. I specialized in family, couples, and individual therapy.
I manage a team of novice therapists undergoing training and internships at this hospital. Personally, I thoroughly enjoy my work, and I take great satisfaction in contributing to my patients' overall well-being improvement in every possible aspect. However, holistic therapy holds a special place in my heart because it treats the human body as a whole, addressing mental, emotional, physical, and spiritual aspects and aligning all the bodies we possess.
Mentoring future therapists is also incredibly rewarding for me. I believe this is my life's purpose."
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