Correção de "The Thoughts of Anne Beraline"

Precisava de escrever um texto sobre uma personagem alheia, para fins pessoais mesmo.
Aí embaixo está ele. Algum erro? '-'

The Thoughts of Anne Beraline
"I do think beautiful people should die. Or at least burn up. All their bodies. For sure I despise them just because of I don't have beauty; but I don't have problems to admit it. Indeed, many of my 'friends' hate it too, but don't want to say that clearly. They depend of beauty to breathe, even if this make suicide ideas."
"Somehow I conqueer the skill of don't thinking too much when I don't want to. It's such a great thing. Once you don't think, you don't exist, right?"
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The Thoughts of Anne Beraline

"I do think beautiful people should die. Or at least burn up. All their bodies. For sure I despise them just because I don't have any beauty; but I don't have problems admitting it. Indeed, many of my 'friends' hate it too, but don't want to say that clearly. They depend on beauty to breathe, even if this makes suicide ideas."
"Somehow I conquered the skill of not thinking too much when I don't want to. It's such a great thing. If you don't think, you don't exist, right?"