Correção de trecho de um diário em inglês

Hi!!!

I'm starting a diary for practice my english and i would like the count on yours help.

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21-06-2012
Yesterday I went to the cinema watch White Snow and the Huntsman. I liked the movie, basic history with cool adaptacion. I don’t like the acting of Kristen Stewart (star of another teen movie - Twilight), that near actors more famous like Charlize Theron and the guy that make Thor, Chris Hemsworth, don’t convinced.

For a Thursday with cold and rain, it’s OK. Horewer, rained in São Paulo all day, the traffic was very very complicate, I took almost two hours for arrive in home. Normally I take twenty, twenty-five minutes. The bus stayed forty minutos stoped in the same place – forty minutes!!!

When I arrived in home I took a big hot chocolate and went to the bed.

Thanks
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Yesterday, I went to the cinema to watch White Snow and the Huntsman. I liked the movie, basic history with cool adaptation. I don’t like the acting of Kristen Stewart (star of another teen movie - Twilight), that near actors more famous like Charlize Theron and the guy that make Thor, Chris Hemsworth, didn't convince.

For a Thursday with cold rain, it’s OK. However, it rained in São Paulo all day, the traffic was very, very complicated, I took almost two hours to arrive at home. Normally, I take twenty, twenty-five minutes. The bus stayed forty minutes in the same place – forty minutes!!!

When I arrived at home I drank a big hot chocolate and went to the bed.
Hi!!!

Thanks a lot!!!

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One more.

Weekend (24_25/06)

Saturday -
I like saturday because 5 days after waking early, i can wake up later. After breakfast leisurely, we (my and my wife Jo) were buy a gift for friend of ours. We buy a machine's tatoo, because she is starting a tatoo and his machine isn't very good. After this, my wife wanted go until a new shopping center that was opened in São Paulo: JK Shopping. As the woman impose the man, i will. kkkkkk. After the shopping visit (3 hours suffering awfully) we go at Memorial of America Latina, a event space, watch a fashion show call House of Criators, where new talents show yours jobs. For end, finishing the day drinking wine in the house of friends.

Sunday - If on saturday i wake up late, imagine on sunday... kkkk... The only thing we do was eat and watching television. Movies and football.

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Saturday - I like Saturdays because after 5 days waking up early, I can wake up later. After breakfast leisurely, we (my and my wife Jo) were buy a gift for a friend of ours. We buy a machine's tatoo, because she is starting a tatoo and his machine isn't very good. After this, my wife wanted go to a new shopping center that opened in São Paulo: JK Shopping. As the woman impose the man, I will. kkkkkk. After the shopping visit (3 hours suffering awfully) we go to Memorial of America Latina, an event space, watch a fashion show call House of Creators, where new talents show their jobs. For end, finishing the day drinking wine in the house of friends.

Sunday - If on Saturdays I wake up late, imagine on Sundays... kkkk... The only thing we do was eat and watch television. Movies and football.
Hi,

I forgot to thank.

I was working a lot and i wasn´t time for write new posts. But the new times are coming and i hope have more time to write.

thanks
Hi,

Everyday I come to work by bicycle. Many people said that is dangerous, because I drive in the same path of the cars. I agree, but unfortunately in my city dont have bicycle path and we that have the chance the go to work on bicycle suffer. Only on Sundays open a bicycle path in many streets, but it is for recreation and dont like a option for mass transport.
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decio.almeida escreveu:Hi,

Everyday I come to work by bicycle. Many people said that is dangerous, because I drive in the same path of the cars. I agree, but unfortunately in my city dont have bicycle path and we that have the chance the go to work on bicycle suffer. Only on Sundays open a bicycle path in many streets, but it is for recreation and dont like a option for mass transport.


Hey,
Dê uma checada nessa parte grifada pois não entendi o que você quis dizer para que eu possa tentar te ajudar!
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Izabella,

primeiro obrigado pela ajuda.

O que eu quis dizer era: "Nós que temos a chance de ir para o trabalho de bicicleta sofremos".

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decio.almeida escreveu:Hi,

Everyday I go to work by bicycle. Many people said that is dangerous, because I drive in the same path of the cars. I agree, but unfortunately in my city dont have bicycle path and we that have the chance the go to work on bicycle suffer. Only on Sundays open a bicycle path in many streets, but it is for recreation and dont like a option for mass transport.


Olha, o que eu, particularmente, mudaria seria o come, se você estiver falando da sua casa, (eu vou), e não do trabalho (eu venho), o suffer, bem, não sei, mas anyway o seu texto está muito bom!! Keep so man!!