Correção do texto: A stranger in front of my window

A stranger in front of my window

When I saw a delicate silhouette of a tiny person in my curtain, I opened it.
I asked her: Who are you? What are you doing in front of my window?

She said: I lost my memories, can you help me? I just know this address 'cause it's on my phone. — her voice was tired and her clothes were dirty — May you give me a glass of water?

I promptly helped her, then I said: I am worried about you, please, come in!

ENTENDENDO AS HORAS EM INGLÊS
Nesta aula, a professora Camila Oliveira ensina vários macetes para você nunca mais se confundir na hora de dizer as horas em inglês. ACESSAR AULA
1 resposta
Leonardo96 19 293
Não tem nada pra corrigir em questão de gramatical, talvez só essa parte "her voice was tired" ficaria melhor se você trocasse por "she sounded tired".