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É sobre tecnologia e suas mudanças nos ultimos 10 anos, preciso utilizar present perfect continuous e conjunctions!

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I’ll talk about technology.
In the last ten years the technology has been changing every time. Ten years ago, Cellphone wasn’t a unknown word, however it was restricted for the people, because the price was very expensive but nowadays you have on your cellphone Internet access, television, everything you imagine, in the palm of your hand and the price has been cheaper.

Cellphone is not only important at work but also at home because with it you can communicate anywhere, either make call other person or accessing the internet. Today, e-mail is a technology has been using frequently both by companies and friends.

Despite the fact that some people use the internet to do wrong things, like steal information, others use to meeting friends. On the Internet it is very easy to access either inappropriate material or people. Above all, the Internet is the most popular technology nowadays.
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Over the last ten years, technology has been constantly changing. Ten years ago, 'cellphone' wasn’t a completely unknown word. However, it wasn't easily accessible to people because the price was too high. But nowadays you have Internet access on your cellphone, television and everything you can imagine on the palm of your hands and at a low price.

Cellphones are not only important at work but also at home because you can communicate with people everywhere through your cellphone: make phone calls as well as access the Internet. Today, the e-mail technology that has been frequently used by people and companies in general.

Despite the fact that some people use the internet to do wrong things, for example: to steal information, others use it to make friends. On the Internet it is very easy to have access to both inappropriate material and people. Above all, the Internet is the most popular technology nowadays.



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