How does the media affect people's lives?

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Avatar do usuário ailime 60 1
Bill,

By reading what you have posted about the bias of the media outlet, I have recalled about what happened here in São Paulo some years ago( 15 or more years ago). The owners of a kindergarten were accused of having committed sexual abuse against some children, and then, all the media behaved biasedly convicting them beforehand, without any care.
The consequence of these actions was disastrous, the school had to be immediately closed amid heated popular reaction. After some months, they were considered innocent, but the damage had already been caused, and unfortunately, it was irreparable.
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Avatar do usuário w.slayman 110
ailime escreveu:Bill,

By reading what you have posted about the bias of the media outlet, I have recalled about what happened here in São Paulo some years ago( 15 or more years ago). The owners of a kindergarten were accused of having committed sexual abuse against some children, and then, all the media behaved biasedly convicting them beforehand, without any care.
The consequence of these actions was disastrous, the school had to be immediately closed amid heated popular reaction. After some months, they were considered innocent, but the damage had already been caused, and unfortunately, it was irreparable.


Ailime,

Overall your post is very good, however some tweaks in word selection and construction may improve and clarify it. Please see what you think about this rewrite.

"While reading what you have posted about the bias of the media outlets I recalled what happened here in Sao Paulo some 15 or more years ago. The owners of a kindergarten were accused of commiting sexual abuse on some children, then through biased reporting and without regard to actual guilt or innocence the media convicted the owners in the court of public opinion. The consequences of the calloused and biased reporting were disastrous as the school was immediately closed due to widespread public anger. Several months later the owners were found to be innocent of all charges, but irreparable damage had already been done to their reputations, social acceptability, and their ability to earn an honest living."

Of course if you do not understand why I made the changes or disagree please let me know.
Avatar do usuário ailime 60 1
Bill,

I could realize I`ve committed lots of mistakes, but lots of doubts came up too. So, please, I would appreciate if you could clarify for me.

The owners of a kindergarten were accused of having committed sexual abuse against some children, and then, all the media behaved biasedly convicting them beforehand, without any care.
.. the school had to be immediately closed amid heated popular reaction.

1) "committed sexual abuse against some children">>>Here you prefered "abuse on". Is against wrong?
2) "the media behaved biasedly ">>> I realized that there is no word "biasedly", so, I shoud have used other words such as "biased with" or "with partiality".
3)" convicting them beforehand" >>>beforehand seems to be a mistake. I should have used the verb "prejudge".
4) " heated popular reaction" >>> Is "heated" also a collocation mistake? Could you suggest another word, please?

Then, partially the phrase should be like: "the media behaved with bias prejudging them, without any care."

I hope I am not bothering you with so many questions..
Avatar do usuário w.slayman 110
ailime escreveu:Bill,

I could realize I`ve committed lots of mistakes, but lots of doubts came up too. So, please, I would appreciate if you could clarify for me.

The owners of a kindergarten were accused of having committed sexual abuse against some children, and then, all the media behaved biasedly convicting them beforehand, without any care.
.. the school had to be immediately closed amid heated popular reaction.

1) "committed sexual abuse against some children">>>Here you prefered "abuse on". Is against wrong?
2) "the media behaved biasedly ">>> I realized that there is no word "biasedly", so, I shoud have used other words such as "biased with" or "with partiality".
3)" convicting them beforehand" >>>beforehand seems to be a mistake. I should have used the verb "prejudge".
4) " heated popular reaction" >>> Is "heated" also a collocation mistake? Could you suggest another word, please?

Then, partially the phrase should be like: "the media behaved with bias prejudging them, without any care."

I hope I am not bothering you with so many questions..


Hi Ailime,

First, you are not a bother, if I did not want to help I would not be on the forum.

1. I should have used against as it the more accurately discriptive word, sorry that was my error. :oops:
2. The proper words would be biased, or partiality either would be correct depending on the contex and construction.
3. Where I used convicting them in the "court of public opinion" that is an idiom meaning to prejudge in public opinion.
4. I omitted that thought, but prefer the phrase "public outrage" as opposed to heated poplular reaction.

If you have any further questions PLAEASE ASK
Avatar do usuário ailime 60 1
Bill,

Thank you for your reply.

"To convict in the court of public opinion" and "public outrage" are really nice choices.
The first one is quite new for me, but new words are always welcome!!

Regards,
All the time, we receive informations but frequently we don't assimilate it. All this news and publicities have more influence in our lifes than we imagine. So our choices are determinated by the media even when we don't realize.
We must pay attention ever and conciously decide what is really important for us.
Avatar do usuário w.slayman 110
weidt escreveu:All the time, we receive informations but frequently we don't assimilate it. All this news and publicities have more influence in our lifes than we imagine. So our choices are determinated by the media even when we don't realize ___.
We must pay _____ attention ever and conciously decide what is really important for us.


Weidt,

Overall your post is very good, however I would like to suggest a few very minor changes: information singular, publicity singular, lives the plural of life, add "it" after realize, and use always instead of ever , placed in front of attention.

With the exception of the corrections your writing is very close to what a native English speaker might write.
Avatar do usuário ENG_rafael 10
Well, to be honest, the media affect our life negatively and positively.
Looking at an positive aspect: We are always networked with what is going on in different points of the world, it's making us less static to the new, to the difference, making us more wake up to the injustice.
Now, an negative aspect: The media is going to be as a BIG BROTHER, a personage of 1984 that's a novel of George Orwell.

Regards!
Avatar do usuário w.slayman 110
ENG_rafael escreveu:Well, to be honest, the media affect our life negatively and positively.
Looking at an positive aspect: We are always networked with what is going on in different points of the world, it's making us less static to the new, to the difference, making us more wake up to the injustice.
Now, an negative aspect: The media is going to be as a BIG BROTHER, a personage of 1984 that's a novel of George Orwell.

Regards!


Rafael,

I would like you to consider the following rewrite and determine why I made the changes, then let me know if you understand or if not what you needs help with.

Well, to be honest, the media affects our lives both negatively and positively. The advantages of the positive aspect are that we are networked throughout the world, allowing us to be more accepting to different ideas and cultures, and making us aware if injustices. On the other hand, the negative aspect is George Orwell's novel "1984", about the big brother syndrome is begining to look like a prophecy that is being fulfilled, albeit three decades late.

Please let me know whether or not you need an explination.
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Avatar do usuário ENG_rafael 10
Bill,

I agree with your changes in my text, it flows better now.

I made mistakes like LIFES instead of LIVES. I enjoyed the using of THROUGHOUT instead of
IN DIFFERENT POINTS OF... one word can substitute one expression, that's amazing!

I have a doubt on the final of my text.
I wrote: "...a personage of 1984 that's a novel of George Orwell..."
You wrote: "...the negative aspect is George Orwell's novel "1984"..."

Is wrong write A NOVEL OF GEORGE ORWELL instead the form you wrote?

One question more, can you give me synonyms of the expression ON OTHER HAND? I don't find out them.

Thank you so much!

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