BrunoCosta escreveu:Salvador!Beautiful place,beautiful beachies.There a lot to do,you are never bored walking there,'cause the ocean fresh air does never aloud it.So if want be happy,one of the cities to visit is Salvador da Bahia!
Bruno see what you think about this.
"Salvador! A beautiful city with beautiful beaches where you never need to be bored because the fresh ocean air is so invigorating. Salvador da Bahia is a city where you can relax, enjoy life and be happy."
I think you should strived to use the more difficult compex sentences that native American English speakers normally use.