Biografia de Beyoncé Knowles

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"Biography: Beyoncé Knowles

Beyoncé Giselle Knowles Carter, the singer Beyoncé was born in Houston on September, 4th 1981. Participated in tyhe girlband Destiny's Child remaining until 2003.
In 2003 she realesed the hit "Crazy in Love" and "Baby Boy". She won 20 Grammys in its history, Beyoncé is also an actress (watch Dream Girls, 2006).
The singer is married to rapper Jay- Z and are parents of Blue Ivy 3 years of age.

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Beyoncé Giselle Knowles Carter, (the - DROP IT OFF) singer Beyoncé was born in Houston on September, 4th 1981. SHE´S A FORMER LEAD VOCALIST OF THE girlband Destiny's Child DISBANDED IN (...), WHERE SHE REMAINED until 2003.
In 2003, she RELEASED the HITS "Crazy in Love" and "Baby Boy". She won 20 Grammys in HER CAREER, Beyoncé is also an actress (Re: Dream Girls, 2006).
The singer is married to rapper Jay- Z and THEY are parents of A THREE-YEAR OLD GIRL, Blue Ivy.