In prose writing (don´t know if you meant poetry or something.) it´s advisable to avoid too many suspensions of thought (the three dots things - ellipsis). It struck me as if you wanted to leave unfinished sentences, ommited or were hesitant.
But then, on second thought, I changed my mind. Then, my impression is that you elaborated a writer-based text, not a reader-based one. We have to think about the audience when we write. And again, it seems that you overplayed your hand with the use of ellipses. It may confuse the reader.
See its usage here:http://www.queens-english-society.com/p ... guide.html
Incidentally, one´s personal path doesn´t mean that is the right path
(or the wrong one, for that matter). Just that one have your say when it comes to their own life matters, and that others should listen to your point of view.
Some ways of communicating are more effective than others, though, that´s why we are here, to learn them.
Communication is always a "two-way street".