Correção the texo: Why I select my major

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Why I select my major

It wasn't easy. I had many options and I want to do everything. A teacher said me that I have first to choose the area. Since I was good at math and physics, I decided to choose a major in some exacts sciences. Then, people said that I should choose a major in something that I like to. So, I could restric my options in Mecatronic, Computer Engineering, Computer Sciences, System Information and Electric Engineering. Among those, System Information was the one whose seats are the least disputed. Thus, this was my choice.

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[1] How I [2] chose my major

It wasn't easy; I had many options and I [3] wanted to do everything, [4] so a teacher [5] told me that first [6] I would have to choose the area. Since I was good at math and physics, I decided to choose a major in some exact science. Then, people said that I should choose a major in something that I liked too. So, I narrowed down my options to Mechatronics, Computer Engineering, Computer Science, Information systems and Electric Engineering. Among those, Information Systems was [7] the one with the least disputed seats. Thus, this was my choice.

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A few observations:

[1] Once you're describing a personal experience in its entirety, I would use 'how' rather than 'why'. It's just a matter of personal taste, though.

[2] Since you had already chosen your major by the time you wrote your text, the sentence should be in the past simple. I found 'choose' more adequate to your sentence than 'select'.

[3] Use simple past here, because you're describing past events.

[4] I added that conjunction so that your speech would flow more smoothly.

[5] You can either say '(someone) told me' or '(someone) said to me'; 'someone said me' is incorrect.

[6] You're talking about an event that was a possibility in the past. Therefore, you should use a 'would + verb' structure.

[7] I would not use the pronoun 'whose' when the subject is not a person or supposed to be a person. Therefore, I rephrased it.

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