Correção de texto: Traveling the world

Avatar do usuário Marcelo Pias 640 1 2 14
Traveling the world

Going abroad is one of the most important things someone can ever do. The benefits you get from experiencing foreign lands are endless. Among the benefits are: personal growth, cultural enrichment and expansion of horizon.

By going abroad and experiencing new ways of thinking and seeing the world, we should be able to grow a lot as a person. One of the main reasons for that, is the fact that we have to adapt to a whole new culture, thus making us stronger to face the challenges of life.

Another extremely important benefit that we get from traveling the world is that we have the opportunity to experience new cultures. Just living for a while in a whole new environment should be enough for us to see how different a culture can be from another. We improve our communication skills a lot as we try hard to understand different people.

Last, but not least, we get to know a lot of people. We deal with people of all kind of tastes, religions, mindsets and so on. We learn a lot by interacting with those people. We also share our own beliefs, where we have the opportunity to compare our ideas to theirs which is incredibly important for our growth as human beings.

In conclusion, it is more than clear how important it is to travel around the world. Personal growth, cultural enrichment and the expansion of our horizons are only a few of the many benefits we get from traveling. The more traveling the more open-minded we will be.

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Avatar do usuário Telma Regina 22725 9 58 570
Marcelo, it's a good text that needed only a few corrections:

*Travelling the world

Going abroad is one of the most important things someone can ever do. The benefits you get from experiencing foreign lands are endless.Among They are include: personal growth, cultural enrichment, and expansion of horizons.

By going abroad and experiencing new ways of thinking and seeing the world, we should be able to grow a lot as a person. One of the main reasons for that, is the fact that we have to adapt to a whole new culture, thus, making us stronger to face the challenges of life.

Another extremely important benefit that we get from *travelling the world is that we have the opportunity to experience new cultures. Just living for a while in a whole new environment should be enough for us to see how different a culture can be from another. We improve our communication skills a lot as we try hard to understand different people.

Last, but not least, we get to know a lot of people. We deal with people of all kind of tastes, religions, mindsets and so on. We learn a lot by interacting with those people. We also share our own beliefs, where we have the opportunity to compare our ideas to theirs which is incredibly important for our growth as human beings.

In conclusion, it is more than clear how important it is to travel around the world. Personal growth, cultural enrichment and the expansion of our horizons are only a few of the many benefits we get from *travelling. The more we travel the more open-minded we will be.
Avatar do usuário Marcelo Pias 640 1 2 14
Thanks a lot Telma. I really appreciate your help.

As for 'traveling vs travelling', though, both are acceptable. While travelling is used in the British English, traveling is more common in the American one. :D

I didn't know that, though.. Thanks for pointing that out!

All the best
Avatar do usuário Telma Regina 22725 9 58 570
You're absolutely right, Marcelo, but I like British English because it's not directly phonetical and, as/when you learn, it becomes easier for you to understand English spoken in other countries.
Avatar do usuário Marcelo Pias 640 1 2 14
Absolutely. Thanks ;D