Correção de texto: Talking about the picture I've seen

Avatar do usuário Marcelo Pias 640 1 2 14
I'm gonna talk about this picture:

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Well.. I see a crowded place, I think they are waiting for some kind of concert, I'm not sure about that but if so, they are really fans of the band or maybe the singer that they are waiting for, because they left their own home and stay outside for a while, many times without their families. I think that it's kind of crazy, but that's not my business, they do what they want ! That's how our world works, or should work.

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Avatar do usuário Juliana Rios 18850 21 98 389
Olá Marcelo! Seu inglês está muito bom. Vou apenas sugerir algumas alterações:

Well... I see a crowded place. I think these people are waiting for some kind of concert, but I'm not sure about that. If so, they must be really big fans of the band or maybe the singer that they are waiting for, because they left their own homes to stay out for a while/for so long, often without their families. I think that it's kind of crazy, but that's none of my business ("Not my business" não é necessariamente errado, mas creio que "none of my business" seja mais idiomático). They can do whatever they want! That's how our world works, or should work.
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Avatar do usuário Marcelo Pias 640 1 2 14
Thank you very much! :D