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Hi my name Junior Sousa and I am eighteen years old , at the moment I study in a university a little far way from my neighborhood , everyday my father take me to university by motorcycle and I back home by bus. I don't like that very much because I spend one hour and thirty minutes in the way back home. One thing I love to do is playing guitar, I've been played for four years and i still remeber the first music learned. Other thing that i like a lot it is go out with my friends and dancing, playing and shopping with them.

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Hi, my name Junior Sousa and I’m eighteen years old. At the moment, I'm studying in a university a little far away from my neighborhood. Everyday my father takes me there by motorcycle and I come back home by bus. I don't like that very much, because I spend an hour and thirty minutes on the way back.
In my free time, I love playing the guitar. I've been playing it for four years and I still remember the first song I learned. Another thing that I like a lot is going out with my friends and dancing, also playing and going shopping with them.

Some points to consider:
We always use the preposition on with the noun way when you are going to one place to another place. Example:
I bumped into John on the way home.
http://dictionary.cambridge.org/pt/dici ... tugues/way

http://oxforddictionary.so8848.com/search1?word=way

The Noun University: the letter u is a vowel but has a consonant sound “y”. Therefore we say “a university” and not an university.
https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/reso ... ce/540/01/

It’s better to use the noun song and not music here. Collocation. We can count songs but not music (uncountable noun). So you must say the first song you learned.
http://guitar.about.com/od/tabchordslyr ... Guitar.htm

https://sites.google.com/site/marysengl ... like-doing

If you started writing a text using contractions go on using them. Don’t mix contracted forms with full forms as you did in the first paragraph e.g. I am eighteen years old. … I’m studying….

Congratulations on your essay. ;)

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Hi, my name Junior Sousa and I am eighteen years old. At the moment I'm studying in an university a little far way from my neighborhood, everyday my father takes me there/I go there by motorcycle and come back home by bus. I don't like that very much, because I spend an hour and thirty minutes in the way back. One thing I love doing is to play the guitar. I've been playing it for four years and I still remeber the first music (that) I learned/learnt. Another thing that I like a lot is going out with my friends and dancing, also playing and shopping with them.

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