Correção de Texto : Writing Passage (TOEFL)

When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?

Physical Education , Art and Music are very important for the human being. Having in mind that the schools do not have enough funding or teachers, it is preferable to cut first the Art and Music Classes.

Firstly, Art and Music can be found in any place, including a house or apartment, because a person can have contact at home with those two factors. Watching a good movie or read a book are good examples of that. Sometimes, a people can learn a, instrument alone because the internt, can be a good guide.

However, the physical education , unfortunately, is not that way. Most of the times, a person when wants to make sport, needs have a good professional on his or her side. Soccer, Tennis and including running are sports which need have, for example, a Couch and even a doctor because the competitor may have some break bones if do not take the rules seriously.

Therefore, it is very important have in mind that art, music and physical educations are good for the society and the school needs force itself to do not take those classes