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When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?

Physical Education , Art and Music are very important for the human being. Having in mind that the schools do not have enough funding or teachers, it is preferable to cut first the Art and Music Classes.

Firstly, Art and Music can be found in any place, including a house or apartment, because a person can have contact at home with those two factors. Watching a good movie or read a book are good examples of that. Sometimes, a people can learn a, instrument alone because the internt, can be a good guide.

However, the physical education , unfortunately, is not that way. Most of the times, a person when wants to make sport, needs have a good professional on his or her side. Soccer, Tennis and including running are sports which need have, for example, a Couch and even a doctor because the competitor may have some break bones if do not take the rules seriously.

Therefore, it is very important have in mind that art, music and physical educations are good for the society and the school needs force itself to do not take those classes

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Hi Almeidarai,

Physical education, art and music are all very important for us, however, when schools do not receive enough funding or do not have enough teachers, it is preferable to cut art and music classes first.

Firstly, art and music can be found virtually anywhere, including at home. Watching a good movie or reading a book are good examples of that. Some people can even teach themselves how to play an instrument just by looking it up on the internet.

However, the same approach to learning or doing an activity doesn't always work when it comes to physical education. Most of the time, a person wanting to participate in some sort of sport needs to have a professional on his or her side. Soccer, tennis as well as running are sports which require a coach and sometimes even a doctor as injures are bound to happen sooner or later.

Therefore, it is important to not underestimate the importance of art, music and also physical education in our society, as such fields of artistic endeavors encompass a broad spectrum of our lives.


Questions you may have

funds = money
funding = money coming in

couch = a long upholstered piece of furniture for several people to sit on
coach = an instructor or trainer in sport

Names of school subjects (math, algebra, geology, psychology) are not capitalized with the exception of the names of languages (French, English). Names of courses are capitalized (Algebra 201, Math 001) and official academic unit titles, e.g., School of Psychology; Department of Theatre, etc.
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