Correção de essays para programa CSF 2014.2

Galera, estou me aplicando no CSF, gostaria de uma opinião de vcs sobre as minha essays! Obrigado!

Study Objectives: In an essay of no less than 250 words and no more than 500 words, write a clear and detailed description of your study objectives. Be specific about your field of study and your specialized interests within this field.

My mother always told me that I was very creative and had a very particular interest on computers and general technology. I grew up with an extended access to computer and electronic resources and soon began to accept the love for science and engineering.

I study Electronic Engineering at the Federal University of Bahia and my main subject of interest is HPC (High Performance Computing), Supercomputing solutions, and its applications on 3D Rendering and CAE. I always dreamed of learning how to develop electronic devices and computational hardware to assist gamers, video makers, engineers and everyone that needs extreme processing performance. There is no better place to learn how to develop these kinds of technologies rather than the USA, especially in California.

Over the past 5 years I began to do some real work in the field of 3D design, video production, CAD, CAE, CAM, photo-realistic rendering and built more than 60 High-End computer machines in the last 2 years. I attended as a speaker and guest consultant on a variety of advanced computer technology events for example: Eletrolar 2012 & 2013 (the largest consumer electronics show for the industry and retail of Latin America); Handyshow 2009 to 2013 (the biggest computer technology event on north and northeast), BGS (Brazil Game Show). I generally speak about high performance devices and new technologies like CUDA from NVidia and multi-processors compact super machines. I have a special line of High-End computers with my online gaming nickname called ArTTech that will soon be on Brazil’s stores. I am coach and consultant for high frequency solid-state memories developed by Kingston and I am Captain of a Formula SAE team (Kamikaze Racing Team) on my university UFBA (Federal University of Bahia) in which I have developed a telemetry solution based on computer technology provided by Intel and Fueltech, my current sponsors.

Intelligent devices, computer-aided tasks, and human-machine interfaces are also fields of study I am interested in learn and develop with US students. The importance of human-machine integration is decisive to extend our limited biological capabilities. The future holds not just multi-core cellphones, but a combination between biological and computer “architectures”, and this may define people’s lives in the near future.

Perspectives in the U.S.: In an essay of no less than 250 words and no more than 500 words, explain the unique perspectives you hope to gain in the U.S. and how you intend to use these skills, knowledge and experience upon your return to your home country.

The vanguard of advanced computer technologies development is the United States. Universities have the particular honor of serving as incubators for the phrase: “Have an idea, launch a startup, and change the world”. In the last years, business “accelerators” at UCLA, USC, Loyola Marymount University, Cal State Fullerton, UC Irvine and Cal State Northridge had an important part on motivating innovation, research and entrepreneurship.

Earn the ability to design and build electronic interfaces/devices to make things easier, accessible and safer is an important deed in a world that technology changes so fast. The enhancement of my knowledge, the additional cultural background, the opportunity to study electronic/computer engineering on a high level university and participate in internship on a computer technology company like Intel, Nvidia, ASUS, Corsair, Pixar or Kingston are my main objectives. Meet new people, exchange habits and philosophies and learn from another culture its way of life. Study in the United States would not only be an opportunity to grow up as student, but as a human being.

As Captain of the Formula SAE team and permitted access to several PhD restricted laboratories on my university (Federal University of Bahia), I had the stimulation to get closer to the academic life and its high “curiosity” environment. The Science Without Borders program is the gate to participate of a whole new level of education and science development. Studying in a high-level university in the USA is going to give me an especial perspective/insight of how ideas grow beyond the education scenario; that is exactly what I want to bring to Brazil.

The inferences above said, guide my dreams and goals on my mid-term achievements. I would love to be part of a research team and work with others to achieve a common goal through collaboration. Study in the US would not only be an opportunity to further learn and improve my knowledge, but it would be a dream come true.

I unequivocally place confidence that this exchange experience will support me to become a sharpened electrical engineer and a more mature person. Upon my return to Brazil, I wish to share my earned knowledge and skill with my colleagues. During the time in U.S.A., I will add everything to my endeavor hoping to show a bit of Brazil to the U.S. Universities and thus cooperate to science and culture reciprocation.