Peço que numa próxima vez, apresente o seu texto com a versão original em português também.
Muitas vezes, queremos expressar algo em inglês e a correção torna-se possível quando temos um texto original como base.
Contamos com sua compreensão.
Por ora, segue:
Education is a powerful weapon. We can improve and develop our knowledge through it and become more critical and reflective citizens; in addition, we find more job opportunities and get better quality of life.
Education motivates self-assurance and provides us with the things we need to participate in today's world. It makes us more independent and aware of what is going on in today's world, when it comes to the awareness of opportunities and rights; it gives us a greater understanding of our capacity and our potential as well.
Our generation has to break down these barriers of languages, cultures and frontiers that it exists today and this is possible with a good education. Good education isnt just about studying hard and getting the best results.
We become perfect not only through gaining something from education, but also contributing to the growth of our nation.