Correção de texto: The miss Brazil 2016

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Raissa Santana is the oldest in a family of fice children, a hardworking young lady, black and doughter of a domestic worker. The miss Brazil 2016 was born in Paraná, and is motive of pride of her mother Rosilene. "Raissa is an exemple of struggle, she had been sad because of the prejudice is still present in our society. Some people kept making bad comment about her skin and the place we live, and it has making him sad. But she have won. She is wonderful." said hers mother.
Danielle Marion from Rio Grande do Norte and Deise D’anne from Maranhão, have benn respectively in the second and third place.
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Raissa Santana is the oldest in a family of fice children, a hardworking, black young lady, and doughter of a domestic worker. The miss Brazil 2016 was born in Paraná, and is motive of pride of her mother Rosilene. "Raissa is an exemple of struggle, she had been sad because of the prejudice is still present in our society. Some people kept making bad comment about her skin and the place we live, and it has making him sad. But she have won. She is wonderful." said hers mother.
Danielle Marion from Rio Grande do Norte and Deise D’anne from Maranhão, have benn respectively in the second and third place.

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Raissa Santana is a hardworking, young black lady, daughter of a domestic worker. She is the oldest [child] in a family of five children. The Miss Brazil 2016 was born in Paraná, and is a source of pride for her mother Rosilene. "Raissa is an example of struggle, she has been sad because the prejudice is still present in our society. Some people keep making negative comments about her skin and the place where she lives, and it has made her sad. But she has won. “She is wonderful”, said hers mother.
Danielle Marion from Rio Grande do Norte and Deise D’anne from Maranhão, were placed the second and third respectively.