Correção de texto em inglês: essay (3)

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the
Same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Libraries are the base of a good education. Also, reading is the best exercise for our brain and libraries are the place where undergraduate goes when they have a doubt. Despite sports are important in a way of introduce needy in society and promote entertainment, libraries contains all the knowledge that an undergraduate needs.
To have a good memory, a good vocabulary and express yourself well. You will need to have a habit of reading. And having a good library with lately newspapers, magazines and books you will probably achieve all this skills. Also, according to specialists the best exercise which our brain could have is reading. When you read you keep your eyes concentrated, you learn new words and you use your imagination to help to interpret what you are reading.
Although, sports activities is part of an undergraduate’s life. But a student comes to college or university to get enough knowledge to achieve a good job after graduated. So, what they really need is an investment in education which is achieved by investing in teachers, infrastructure and of course in libraries.
In conclusion, despite of internet has a lot of information. Some of them are doubtful and if go to a library you are almost sure that the information that you will get is true. Then according to the goals of provides a good education which most universities have, investing more money in libraries than sports makes the institute better because it will graduate better students.
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Libraries are the basis of a good education. Also, reading is the best exercise for our brain and libraries are the place where undergraduate students go when they are in doubt. Despite the fact that sports are important in a way of including the needy in society and promoting entertainment, libraries contains all the knowledge that an undergraduate needs.
To have a good memory, a good vocabulary and express yourself well. You will need to have a habit of reading. And having a good library with up-to-date newspapers, magazines and books you will probably achieve all this skills. Also, according to specialists the best exercise which our brain could have is reading. When you read you keep your eyes concentrated, you learn new words and you use your imagination to help to interpret what you are reading.
Although, sports activities is part of an undergraduate’s life. But a student comes to college or university to get enough knowledge to get a good job after they graduate. So, what they really need is an investment in education which is achieved by investing in teachers, infrastructure and of course in libraries.
In conclusion, despite the fact that the Internet has a lot of information. Some of them are doubtful and if go to a library you are almost sure that the information that you will get is reliable. Then according to the goals of providing good education which most universities have, investing more money in libraries than sports makes the institute better because it will graduate better students.