Correção de texto: My Saturday

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The first thing I did as soon as I woke up was going to the bathroom, washing my face then brushing my teeth. I was really excited about the day because my cousin was getting married and I was really looking forward to that party!
At midday I had lunch with my family as I usually do and in the afternoon I did some things like watching videos, playing games and stuff like that in order to spend some time a bit faster since I was eager to attend the party!
When the night drew near I got ready to go and rock that party! It was a nice one, everyone was happy, positive, feeling really good so it was easy for me to join them. It was one of the best wedding parties I have ever gone.
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The first thing I did as soon as I woke up (or awoke) was *to tidy myself up. I was really excited about the day because my cousin was getting married and I was really looking forward to the party.
At midday I had lunch with my family, as I usually do, and, in the afternoon, I tried **to occupy myself by/use my time watching videos, playing games and stuff like that in order to make time fly, since I was eager/keen/so enthusiastic to attend the party!
When the night drew near/in, I got ready to go and rock the party! It was a ***nice/great/good/cool/fun/pleasant one, everyone was happy, positive, feeling really great/good, so it was easy for me to join them. It was one of the best wedding parties I have ever been to.

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Your text is good, Marcelo. I suggested other adjectives and improvements to your vocabulary that can be used in the text.
*Instead of describing what you do every morning in the bathroom, you can use phrasal verbs like "tidy yourself up", "spruce yourself up", "clean yourself up". If female, some say, "and put my war paint on". In GB, there is a slang called the "three S's" (do the three S's).
**Too much use of the word "thing".
**Try to use other descriptive words as well, because as "nice" fits into virtually everything positive, you tend not to discover other words.

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.p ... ee%20s%27s
http://www.macmillandictionary.com/dict ... /tidy-up_3
http://www.thefreedictionary.com/spruce+up

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Thanks a lot for your correction!
I've been learning a lot from you !