Correção de texto: The secretary (the plot) 2

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The fate took Emilio to Copito Company, a toilet roll factory, in where he wants a position that make a growth in her carrier. There he fall in love with a young wamen called Antônia, who turns out to be a commercial manager at this company, but so as wins her heart he has to do successful work as a secretary.
Emilio had to adapt in a position thas for too long had been associated to womans, just to humiliate him, the bosses make him dress like the woman and he had to tolerate all bad jokes from the other secretaries, who at first didn’t like him, and the other employees.
Even though Emilio is loyal, optimistic, amable and efficient, he is also kind of absent minded, whitch make him easely get in trouble, especially with Felix the owner of the company. Antônia, who is Felix ‘s fiancée get along with Emilio and support him frequently, and she is always there for him.
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The fate took Emilio to Copito Company, a toilet roll factory, in where he wants a position that make a growth in her carrier. There he fall in love with a young wamen called Antônia, who turns out to be a commercial manager at this company, but so as wins her heart he has to do successful work as a secretary.
Emilio had to adapt in a position thas for too long had been associated to womans, just to humiliate him, the bosses make him dress like the woman and he had to tolerate all bad jokes from the other secretaries, who at first didn’t like him, and the other employees.
Even though Emilio is loyal, optimistic, amable and efficient, he is also kind of absent minded, whitch make him easely get in trouble, especially with Felix the owner of the company. Antônia, who is Felix ‘s fiancée get along with Emilio and support him frequently, and she is always there for him.

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The fate took Emilio to Copito Company, a toilet roll factory, where he is angling for a position that allows him to grow professionally (OU a job that allow him to grow in his career). There he fell in love with a young woman called Antônia, who turns out to be a commercial manager at this company, but so as to win her heart he has to do [some] successful work as a secretary.
Emilio had to adapt to a position that for too long had been associated with women, just to humiliate him, the bosses forces him dress like a woman and he had to tolerate all bad jokes not only from the other secretaries, who at first didn’t like him, but also from the other coworkers.
Even though Emilio is loyal, optimistic, amiable and efficient. He is also kind of absent-minded, which make him easily get in trouble, especially with Felix the owner of the company. Antônia, who is Felix’s fiancée, got along with Emilio and she supports him frequently, and she is always there for him.