Correção do texto "E-mail em inglês para uma velha amiga"!

mlm
Olá a todos! Gostaria de saber se meu texto necessita de correções na gramática e se ele está bem estruturado. Toda ajuda é bem vinda! Lembrando que esse texto, é como se eu estivesse respondendo uma e-mail de uma velha amiga.

Dear Lori,

It was great to hear from you after such a long time! Today, I was thinking about the times that we spent together and checking my e-mail box. There was nothing interesting, just adversement. I was just about to close my e-mail whne I received yours.What a good surprise! You asked me what I've been doing. Well, I've got a new job as a computer engineering at Microsoft. The office where I work is set on main street, and the most convenient way to get there is go by foot, because my house is not too far from there and the traffic is terrible. Do you remember my girlfriend Mary? I broke up with her. You was right, she doesn't deserve me. I think it's never too late to restart. It would be lovely to see you some time. We could meet for lunch.

your friend
Steve.


TIA!
Anúncio Você tem medo de falar inglês? - Se você já estudou inglês mas ainda se sente inseguro(a) saiba que o primeiro passo é se expor ao idioma. Converse grátis por 15 minutos com um professor de inglês nativo, você vai se surpreender o quanto isso pode fazer a diferença.

Começar agora!
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Donay Mendonça 22 99 1.5k
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It was great to hear from you after such a long time! Today, I was thinking about the times that we spent together, while I was checking my e-mail box. There was nothing interesting, just advertisements. I was just about to close my e-mail when I received yours.What a good surprise! You asked me what I've been doing. Well, I've got a new job as a computer engineer at Microsoft. The office where I work is on main street, and the most convenient way to get there is on foot, because my house is not too far from there and the traffic is terrible. Do you remember my girlfriend Mary? I broke up with her. You were right, she doesn't deserve me. I think it's never too late to start over. It would be lovely to see you some time. We could meet for lunch.
mlm
Thank you Donay.
Anúncio Você tem medo de falar inglês? - Se você já estudou inglês mas ainda se sente inseguro(a) saiba que o primeiro passo é se expor ao idioma. Converse grátis por 15 minutos com um professor de inglês nativo, você vai se surpreender o quanto isso pode fazer a diferença.

Começar agora!