Correção de Texto: An encounter that changed a life

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An encounter that changed a life

He was returning to his home after work and took the same bus he used to take. But, in that day some different happened. Next to his seat was a woman that did not stop to look him. Since he was uncomfortable with the situation, he moved to another seat. But the woman, realizing he was trying to get away from her, came to him and said:
_ Have you ever thought about working as a model?
_ What?!, he said.
_ Yes, you are perfect for the job!
Before he could said something, she gave to him a card and left the bus. He hadn't cared about that and followed his life normally. However, few months after, found the card togheter his stuffs. In the card, he could find the contact information of a model agency. Since he had lost his job, he thought it wouldn't cost anything to try. For his surprise, he was immediately contracted by the agency and, nowadays, he earn lots of money working as a model for this agency.

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A meeting that changed a life

He was coming back home after work and took the same bus that he used to take. But on that day some different happened. Next to his seat there was a woman that could not stop staring at him. Since he was uncomfortable with the situation, he moved to another seat. But the woman, realizing he was trying to get away from her, came to him and said:
_ Have you ever thought about working as a model?
_ What! He said.
_ Yes, you are perfect for the job!

Before he could say something, she gave him a card and got out of the bus. He didn't care about that and went on living his life normally. However, a few months later, he found the card together with his stuff. On the card, he saw the contact information of a model agency.

Because (just to avoid repetition- you already used since above) he had lost his job, he thought it wouldn't cost anything at all to try. To his surprise, he was immediately contracted by the agency and nowadays he earns lots of money working as a model for this agency.


Draylson:

Stuff is always a singular noun.

We say To my surprise. Not for…

Look at me, look at him you need a preposition. The best verb choice here is to stare at
http://dictionary.cambridge.org/pt/dici ... Fsomething


We use the preposition on with the noun day:
On Monday, On my birthday, on weekdays….


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