Correção de "texto em inglês - Kony 2012"

Escrevi um texto após assistir ao vídeo Kony 2012. Achei um tanto complicado escrever a crítica a um vídeo desse tipo, com carater ativista e político. Gostaria que vocês me ajudassem corrigindo e sugerindo jeitos mais corretos de se expressar.
Acredito que o conteúdo do meu texto possa ser um pouco polêmico, entretanto esse forum não é de debates.


Kony 2012

Kony 2012 is a film and campaign created to raise funds that will be used to search and arrest Joseph Kony, a kidnapper of African children. The film aim to show the invisible children that are kidnapped, raped, murdered and forced to participate in the rebel armies. You may wondering how the campaign will arrest the Kony: putting American Armies in the Africa!
That description looks like a supportive amazing project. Unfortunately it isn't. Kony 2012 is a film that use many manipulative advertising techniques. During the film I was wondering If I was watching a activist documentary or a commercial advertising.
The film shows the Joseph Kony like he was the most important problem of Africa. Everybody knows that it isn't true. Joseph Kony is not the unique rebel in the Africa and won't be the last. Africa is replete of Kony's. If you arrest one, soon another come on. So, it's obvious that campaign is not useful besides keep the American Armies in the Africa.
Kony 2012 is only other method to manipulate and stole the new generation of Facebook.

If you want to watch this film, click in the link below:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y4MnpzG5Sqc