Hy guys,this is a TOEFL question and I'd like to be corrected,( )please.
When it comes to friendship,( )the traits that I appreciate most are loyalty and good humour.( )It's always good to have someone close to you that you can count on whenever you need him,( )a person who is thick and thin to you.
A good friend is also the one who displays a good mood,( )that means,( )someone who makes you laugh,( )who cheers you up when you are down. ( )Surely,in order to have good friends,( )we also need to be good friends because a valuable friendship is made up by mutual trustness.Some first impressions and views of mine:
1-) I understand that you might be pressed to produce some writing, but heed your spelling, "aways" may hint that you are in haste, but it´s not reason enough not to proofread before submitting. You are a TOEFL candidate, so we demand a bit more of it.
2-) I don´t know if there was the program you used, but there´s a lack of space between some words and the subsequent information, so I have provided it with a ( ) to signal where it happens. Punctuation is also a much needed convention of the communicative task.
3-) Overall, the task was met and the content relevant, you seems like having to practice linking words and a bit of punctuation to connect the text a bit more.
We are raring to go, having high expectation about the next writings of yours. And we are sure that you will see that we are helping you out by incentivising you to submit more of them, instead of just providing the proverbial fish.
You have an operational knowledge of English and a good repertoire of words, so the tools are there, let´s go at it!