Correção de Essay - Small towns or big cities?

Hello.

Here's another essay in the TOEFL model.

Obrigado desde já!

Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big

city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and

details to support your answer.


Big cities have big advantages

It’s true that both small towns and big cities have their own advantages. I really prefer, however, to live in the big ones. It is known that there are a lot of big cities with different conditions around the world, but even with that differences, it’s possible to think about general characteristics and advantages.

Firstly, when you live in a big city, especially in the called “global cities”, there are a lot of people from other countries. Therefore, it’s possible learn about other cultures and change experiences. Even for those who haven’t interest in acquiring that type of knowledge, a big city has big advantages. There are a lot of events for every type of person. For instance, I love music and I like attending concerts, which is possible in a big city, but isn’t in most of small towns. This is a deal breaker for me.

In a big city, there are a lot of things going on and changing. A big city is dynamic. I really like all these movement and the speed in which things happen. I think I would never like living in a small town, where the pace is too slow. Big cities have more diversity in almost all aspects. For example, in these cities, it’s possible do find someone with the same interests that you, even if these interests are very uncommon.

I am attending undergraduate classes of computer science and I plan to work in a world company, wich usually are in big cities. Thus, for (to?) me, living in a big city is the best option even in the professional aspect.

It is known that big cities might be much more expensive than small towns to live in. However, due to all the benefits and facilities that a big city has, I think spending more money worth it.


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Errors that I noticed:

change experiences ---> exchange experiences
it's possible to .... ---> I don't know it this expression is right, it sounds a bit strange in English!