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Hi, my name is Rodrigo. I'm 23 years old. I'm from São Paulo,but now I live in Curitiba. I have studied accountancy in PUC since 2010. In my free-time I like meeting friends in cinema or just lying on the grass in a park and reading a good book.My english isn't good, so I started last summer a english course.

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Rodrigo,

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Hi, my name is Rodrigo. I'm 23 years old. I'm from São Paulo but now I live in Curitiba. I have studied accountancy in PUC since 2010. In my free time, I like meeting my friends at the cinema or just lying on the grass in a park to read a good book. My english isn't very good, so I started an English course last summer.
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Hi, my name is Rodrigo, 23. I'm from São Paulo, but now I'm living in Curitiba. I have studied accouncancy in PUC since 2010. When I'm free, I like to meet friends at cinema or just lying on the grass in a park and read a good book. My english isn't good, so I started a english course last summer.
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Hello, I call Rodrigo and I'm 23 years old. I was born in São Paulo but now I'm living in Curitiba. I've studied accountancy in PUC since 2010.
When I have a little free time , I like to meet up with my best friends at the cinema or simply to go to some park and lying on the grass to read a really good book. My English isn't so good, because this I joined in a English Course last summer.


Eu fiz essas mundaças no texto e gostaria de saber se ficou boa e se tem algum erro.

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