Correção de texto: "I worked in TV Journal..."

Eu escrevi esse texto e gostaria que eu alguém me dissesse se está tudo certo em concordância:

“I worked in TV Journal at the beginning of college. In the third year of college I had to leave it to work in my field, but I did not like. I wanted to return to work with TV newspapers so I need to finish the business school and study communication.”

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“ I worked in (A) TV Journal at the beginning of college. DURING ITS third year, I had to leave it FOR WORKING in my field, but I did not like IT. I WANT to return to work with TV NEWS; THUS I need to finish the business school and I ALSO NEED TO START STUDYING communication.”