Correção de texto: "Rates of smoking in Someland"

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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

You should write at least 150 words.
Allow yourself 20 minutes for this task.





The graph above shows the rates of smoking in Someland from 1960 to 2000. It does not specify the age of the groups, therefore showing us figures separated merely by genders.

The number of men smoking decreases throughout the graph. On the other hand, the number of women smoking increases from 1960 to 1975. It remains steady from 1975 to 1980. From 1980 on this number starts falling until the last year shown in the graph.

In my point of view, the number of people smoking starts to fall nonstop in both genders after 1980 due to the massive criticism against cigarettes on newspapers, radio or TV. Since scientists proved that cigarettes are really harmful to the human body, anti-tobacco groups and advertisements are commonly seen everywhere.

In the 2000 years, the number of men and women smoking are closer than never before, considering the graph. However, the number of women smokers is still not as small as it was in 1960.