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The substances introduced into your body by the cigarret, cause imediate harm. Damaging your health and elevating the risk of several diseases. The substances present in the cigarret smok damage your respiratory system. Besides, with the age, the smoking reduce your breathing capacity and others problems.
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The substances introduced into your body by cigarettes cause immediate harm, damaging your health and elevating the risk of several diseases. The substances present in cigarette smoke damage your respiratory system. Besides, with the age, smoking reduces your breathing capacity and causes other problems.

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