Correção de Texto: Vote

The vote is very important for the society because it allows a person to choose a good or bed representants for him/her country. Children over the age of fifteen can not have a mature decision about this topic yet.

If conversations about economy and politics can be really hard and boring for some growed people, imaging persons who have fifteen years old. In this fase the ideas about what is to be part of the society and how to contribute for a better world isn't total concluded, so the vote liberation for this age can cause bed consequences.

First of all, the children can not vote with confidency and some of them can make of this into a play.They can just vote because this act let him or her feels like an adult. In addition , some persons over the age of fifteen can be easy influencieted for other people. That way, they votes can be, sometimes, easily bought.

The vote act is quite important for the society and it needs to be respected. Good voters need to know how this little act can contribute for the future of a country and have maturity it is very important for the final decions for choosing a representant.
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The vote is very important for the society, because it allows THE PEOPLE DEMOCRATICALLY choose THEIR REPRESENTATIVES, WHETHER THEY ARE GOOD OR BAD FOR THE country. Children YOUNGER THAN SIXTEEN MIGHT HAVE NOT a mature DISCERNMENT about this topic yet.

If conversations about economy and politics MAY be really hard and boring for some ADULT people, WE CAN IMAGINE HOW IT MIGHT SOUND TO TEENAGERS. AT THIS AGE, the ideas about BEING part of the society and how to contribute for a better world ARE NOT QUITE CLEAR AND FORMED, so the AT THIS AGE THE RIGHT OF VOTING COULD BRING BAD consequences.

First of all, the children COULD not vote with CONFIDENCE and some of them MIGHT CONSIDER THIS A play. They WOULD vote, because this COULD MAKE THEM FEEL AS ADULTS. In addition TO THAT, some PEOPLE, YOUNGER THAN SIXTEEN can be easy INFLUENCED BY OLDER ONES. THIS way, THEIR VOTING INTENTIONS COULD EASILY BE MANIPULATED OR bought.

The ELECTIONS AND THE VOTING RIGHT ARE quite important for the society and it needs to be respected. Good voters need to know how this little act can contribute for the future of a country and WITH THE INDISPENSABLE maturity it is very important for the final RESULTS OF choosing THEIR REPRESENTATIVES.

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